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Words on paper
lyrics in a song
conscious and subconscious
painted on the wall

Call on your conscience
Monsanto's is poisoning your Kids
in your subconscious
the government poisons your head

The FDA feeds you lies
'cause there's no money in the cure
Honeybees can't pollinate
Bayer, there's more you should know
and even less you can trust

Look out the end game is clear.
Global warming or climate change
fossil fuels refined
subconscious; we only have one earth, what should we do ?

Lovers wear blinders
the rich are still fat
conscious, help us
Population control is a fact.
beware of False idols

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Fisherella Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2012  Professional General Artist
Nice poem. Very true.
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devinemrs Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you. :iconpurpleheartplz:
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masonicon Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2012
and that's concludes population control aren't the best way to save our earth because even after most of world population are gone, the rich can consumes what left on our earth
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devinemrs Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
True. Have you seen the Georgian Guidestones ?
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masonicon Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2012
here it is: [link]
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devinemrs Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Great video thank you.
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Nawsachi Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
True words indeed.
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devinemrs Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you.
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artist00 Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2012
The title is rather misleading, because sweet-potatoes and alike are being used for birth control [link]

Here is an interesting documentary about Monsanto and their evil doing if someone is interested.
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devinemrs Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks for the links.. Did not know about the sweet-potatoes ... interesting.
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artist00 Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2012
You are welcome and thank you as well for your interesting uploads/posts. Glad to add some information
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The-Dormant-Sprite Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2012  Student Writer
Are you looking for critique?
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devinemrs Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It was a great idea... I added the critique and would love it if you would critique. Thank you again.
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The-Dormant-Sprite Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2012  Student Writer
A few notes:

First Stanza: Are the first three lines painted on the wall or is paint on the wall another object listed?

Second Stanza: Do you mean conscience or conscious? I only ask because you referred to the conscious in your first stanza. And you only need the apostrophe-S after "Monsanto" if you don't follow it by "is." And you don't need an apostrophe in "Kid's."

Third Stanza: I would put an apostrophe before "cause" so you can differentiate between the shortened version of because and cause, the word. You don't need the apostrophe in "Honeybee's," and I'm wondering why "Bayer" is put in single quotation marks. If you're addressing Bayer, there should be a comma after its name.

Fourth Stanza: The first line should have some sort of punctuation. I'm not sure where "subconscious" fits into it. And you have an extra space in front of the question mark in the last line.

Fifth Stanza: I think you mean, "Lovers wear blinders." And again, do you mean conscience or conscious?

For the most part, I think your ideas are clearly stated. I'm not sure where the first stanza fits in, or the subconscious/conscious comparison. Maybe work a little bit on that. I would also rethink your capitalization and punctuation--it seems a little inconsistent to me. But overall, good work. Keep it up.
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devinemrs Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, I have only ever written a few but I will go over it with your notes. You're awesome and the feed back is greatly appreciated.
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The-Dormant-Sprite Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2012  Student Writer
It was my pleasure!
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devinemrs Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
No should I ? I guess I could use it.
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MellowShroom Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2012
very nice!
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devinemrs Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much. :iconpurpleheartplz:
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